Randy's Girl

So I think this is a really good poem for this subject. I like how you focus more on how she feels, than the cutting itself. I like how you ...

I definetly think you should continue the story it sounds really really good. I would love to see whee it goes:)

I like the way you capture the story in your words. Though i would not use so many ands. They break it up I think it would be betterif you ...

Wow I totally like it the description is amazing!